Nooooooo....How can you end it like that!!?? :) You must write more!Your use of allusions adds a humorous touch to the serious situation.
Should have kept going with it. Funny story!
So suspenseful.
Good story
Quality story, but I would have liked it see more. It ended too soon.
Who was truly is it!
You kind of shot a police officer.... Gee I wonder what you did! Made me laugh, Love the story
You forgot you didn't have pants on?! What? Funny story.
I think there was something wrong with that cop. He's so strict with the law and assumed that it was Jordan that was the drug-drealer. Really good story.
Good story. I would have liked to see more, but good overall.
You should have kept going! What a funny story! I was Lol'ing the whole time tbh, haha.
Good story. I like the humor towards the beginning.
I loved the "It's not cause I'm black, is it?" part!
This story was intense I wish I got to know who really was it :)
I hate it when people speed especially when they go 1mph above it. That just grinds my gears.
WHO WAS IT?Great story, I enjoyed it
Very suspenseful! I don't think you should be able to suspect something not true!
Suspenseful! I need to know whoooo!
SUSPENSEFUL!!!!!!
I want more!
There should've been more at the end! But very funny good storyy.!
Intense.
Good!
Really intense!
wow the ending! Write More!!
More Jordan! Great job! No! Not on the purple Macho Man shirt!
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Nooooooo....How can you end it like that!!?? :) You must write more!
ReplyDeleteYour use of allusions adds a humorous touch to the serious situation.
Should have kept going with it. Funny story!
ReplyDeleteSo suspenseful.
ReplyDeleteGood story
ReplyDeleteQuality story, but I would have liked it see more. It ended too soon.
ReplyDeleteWho was truly is it!
ReplyDeleteYou kind of shot a police officer.... Gee I wonder what you did! Made me laugh, Love the story
ReplyDeleteYou forgot you didn't have pants on?! What? Funny story.
ReplyDeleteI think there was something wrong with that cop. He's so strict with the law and assumed that it was Jordan that was the drug-drealer. Really good story.
ReplyDeleteGood story. I would have liked to see more, but good overall.
ReplyDeleteYou should have kept going! What a funny story! I was Lol'ing the whole time tbh, haha.
ReplyDeleteGood story. I like the humor towards the beginning.
ReplyDeleteI loved the "It's not cause I'm black, is it?" part!
ReplyDeleteThis story was intense I wish I got to know who really was it :)
ReplyDeleteI hate it when people speed especially when they go 1mph above it. That just grinds my gears.
ReplyDeleteWHO WAS IT?
ReplyDeleteGreat story, I enjoyed it
Very suspenseful! I don't think you should be able to suspect something not true!
ReplyDeleteSuspenseful! I need to know whoooo!
ReplyDeleteSUSPENSEFUL!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteI want more!
ReplyDeleteThere should've been more at the end! But very funny good storyy.!
ReplyDeleteIntense.
ReplyDeleteGood!
ReplyDeleteReally intense!
ReplyDeletewow the ending! Write More!!
ReplyDeleteMore Jordan! Great job! No! Not on the purple Macho Man shirt!
ReplyDeleteGood story
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