Tuesday, October 28, 2014

Story #37: The Unlucky Night

28 comments:

  1. I'm glad everything worked out for them :) It was a great story

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  2. Whoa! That escalated rather quickly. Good story

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  3. The author wrote "little" almost nine times. I will say altogether it was a good story.

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  4. Woa a little brutal but well written

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  5. Good description on the chase. Well written and good overall.

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  6. Very intense story! but with a good ending maybe never wanting to come back!

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  7. "Rinky dink town" - love that. Bet they think differently of it now!

    I laughed out loud at "unknown man 1." :)

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  8. wow at least the bad guys were stopped!

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  9. "Rinky Dinky town", i agree with Mrs. Orman great humor in the story!!

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  10. Happy ending- glad they all were safe. :) Well written

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  11. Great story! At the end of the first page I think you put caved in when I think you meant gave in. Otherwise great job!

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  12. Nice Ending, The Bad Guys go down!!

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