I'm glad everything worked out for them :) It was a great story
Very graphic story.
Whoa! That escalated rather quickly. Good story
The author wrote "little" almost nine times. I will say altogether it was a good story.
Woa a little brutal but well written
Good description on the chase. Well written and good overall.
Very visually detailed.
Great story! Good imagery!
... Plot twist. Great story
That night was truly unlucky
Very intense story! but with a good ending maybe never wanting to come back!
"Rinky dink town" - love that. Bet they think differently of it now!I laughed out loud at "unknown man 1." :)
Sounds like a real bad experience :O
wow at least the bad guys were stopped!
"Rinky Dinky town", i agree with Mrs. Orman great humor in the story!!
I'm glad everyone was ok :)
Happy ending- glad they all were safe. :) Well written
GREATN STORY BROSIF :D
funny story, well written
Good details and good story!
Great story and a happy ending!
Great story! At the end of the first page I think you put caved in when I think you meant gave in. Otherwise great job!
Nice Ending, The Bad Guys go down!!
Cool story! Awesome ending! :)
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