Thursday, October 23, 2014

Story #18: Intruder

30 comments:

  1. Really good. It was intense and kept me reading!!

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  2. The authors attention to detail is flowing throughout the story very well. Loved it.

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  3. Intruder was absolutely perfect. This story was written VERY well, I loved it.

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  4. I felt like I was really there! I was scared for her. Great Job!

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  5. Really kept me reading, nice cliff hanger

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  6. Awesome story I love how she saved the cat still.

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  7. I loved the Cliff hanger at the end! it was really good! i thought it was really well written and brilliant!

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  8. Great idea for a story! Like BRICK(: said- brilliant idea. Never wanted it to end.

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  9. Great story, loved the cliff hanger!

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  10. This reminds me of a movie trailer. Very descriptive!

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  11. Amazing story liked the suspense

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  12. Very Intense scary to think something like that could happen!

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  13. The makings of a mystery novel in my opinion.

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  14. Amazing story and good suspense

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  15. I like the story and the ending! The ending really leaves you with questions.

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  16. Amazing story! You need to write more! This could be a great mystery novel. :)

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  17. Intense and suspenseful! I loved this story ~ (:

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  18. You wrote this very well! Amazing plot!

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  19. Kept my attention! Very organized!

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  20. Very well written story! Kept me reading the whole time. Frightening and scary but very very good!

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  21. the description of the intruder being built like a brick wall was awesome!

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  22. Very well written! Loved your descriptions! Loved the suspense!

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  23. I thought I had already commented on this one. Oops!

    It is soooo intense! The intruder is seriously creepy, too. Gave me chills. Well done!

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  24. i like this. its a pretty good story

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