Wow! This reads like chapter one in a novel. (sci-fi? fantasy? suspense? all of the above?) I appreciate your subtle humor: "The bodyguards' duties had been burned out, much like their ambitions after being assigned to guard duty." And the dual perspectives--love that! So, I encourage you to keep writing...because you need to continue Lionel's view. Right??
I really liked this story it was well written and overall good :)
Very wow. Very suspense as to what happened to Lionel. Such long.*insert picture of shiba inu winking*
Much Wow! Well written! Crazy names
That story was truly untitled and had some titular status
That was great. Super creative
Interesting plot and names. I enjoyed reading this.
Good story and good plot! Very suspenseful!
Very interesting story.
Geez! This story was written really well All in for a sequel??
^^^^ I AGREE WITH CROSE!! SEQUEL, PLEASE! ^^^^
Wow! Great story, loved it.
great story would definitely read it again
SUPER AMAZING!! LOVE IT!! :D
This was a great story! very interesting!
great story love it.
Good story! I got lost a few times but it was great!
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