Monday, October 27, 2014

Story #34: Lost But Not Found

31 comments:

  1. I don't want to go haunted housing anymore
    I have chills, great writing

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  2. I liked how it was short but still managed to leave me in suspense and scared. Great story!!

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  3. Very suspenseful story I love how he just disappears without a trace.

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  4. Disappearing without anything. Wow really liked it. Suspenseful. Very well written stories.

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  5. Wolf packs, people dying. The rumors of the Halloween Party was a sign not to go. Spooky story.

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  6. The ending is really suspenseful, it really leaves you wondering!

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  7. Your story was incredible and very detailed. All around well written. I love how we never really know what happened to him.

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  8. I would be so paranoid if this happened to me. Scary.

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  9. Very suspenseful ending. Great story!

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  10. another reason why i hate the dark!

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  11. Very sad how she lost camden just trying to have fun. Very suspenseful!

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  12. Wish they would've found him :(
    "inky blackness'- great description. Great story

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  13. I would never play a game like that by a cemetery!!! super scary and sad!! omggg..

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  14. **SPOILER ALERT**

    I have to admit, I don't really feel bad for Camden. Natalie is better off without him. I mean, any guy who just pulls up to the curb and rolls the window down and yells, "Are you just going to stand there? Get in..." doesn't deserve someone like Natalie, or any girl. And if she didn't want to go, why make her?? And, in reality, he probably DID sneak off and hopped on one of those horses (since there is now an excess of them) and headed to Justice J. Cole University to watch Derek Schiller play his first collegiate basketball game. And he did this all while Natalie was all alone in a cemetery weeping for him. JERK!

    Natalie, my friend, you are much better off without him!

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    1. Oh, and very well written story! What you have written is interesting and compelling. The ending was a little abrupt, though. I felt I needed more resolution (so I just filled in with my own resolution. Hope you don't mind. lol).

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  15. I liked the description of Natalie at the beginning! :)

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  16. Great suspense. Very descriptive!

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  17. Crazy! I wish I knew what happened to Camden. That's scary to think about.

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  18. I will be honest when I say I didn't like Camden, but still pretty sad!

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