Wow! This reads like chapter one in a novel. (sci-fi? fantasy? suspense? all of the above?) I appreciate your subtle humor: "The bodyguards' duties had been burned out, much like their ambitions after being assigned to guard duty." And the dual perspectives--love that! So, I encourage you to keep writing...because you need to continue Lionel's view. Right??
Wow! This reads like chapter one in a novel. (sci-fi? fantasy? suspense? all of the above?) I appreciate your subtle humor: "The bodyguards' duties had been burned out, much like their ambitions after being assigned to guard duty." And the dual perspectives--love that!
ReplyDeleteSo, I encourage you to keep writing...because you need to continue Lionel's view. Right??
I really liked this story it was well written and overall good :)
ReplyDeleteVery wow. Very suspense as to what happened to Lionel. Such long.
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Much Wow! Well written! Crazy names
ReplyDeleteThat story was truly untitled and had some titular status
ReplyDeleteThat was great. Super creative
ReplyDeleteInteresting plot and names. I enjoyed reading this.
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ReplyDeleteGeez! This story was written really well All in for a sequel??
ReplyDelete^^^^ I AGREE WITH CROSE!! SEQUEL, PLEASE! ^^^^
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ReplyDeletegreat story would definitely read it again
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ReplyDeleteSUPER AMAZING!! LOVE IT!! :D
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ReplyDeleteGood story! I got lost a few times but it was great!
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