Very suspenseful.
I liked the Idea, it was creative
Love this story.
suspenseful and surprising
The story was super creative and the cliff hanger was on point. Also, the futuristic setting was perfect for this story.
Nice plot twist I really enjoyed it
I voted it best futuristic reality.
Love the futuristic setting, and the cliffhanger at the end made me wish there was more to read!
All I can say is "Twins Basil, twins."
Really good cliff hanger!
Makes me wonder what could be next!
I love that he was working on his English short story within the story. :) I seriously hope you keep writing this story. It's so interesting. It sounds like the beginnings of an excellent dystopian novel.
I like the cliffhanger at the end, it leaves you wanting to low what the truth is.
I really like the suspense. Got me wanting to read more.
This story was really good! The cliffhanger was perfect, but now you just need to write more!!
I wish there was more to read! I really enjoyed this story!
Beautiful story
I enjoyed reading this story.
THIS WAS A MASTERPIECE M8!
enjoyed reading
I really enjoyed how this story was written. I hope you write the rest of it!
KEEP WRITTING THE STORY :D :) :P :)
Very suspenseful and cool!
i really like the story plot its very interesting
Loved it, great plot!
I liked the suspense and the telepathic communication!
The plot of this story was very well written. Loved it!
I like all the description you use in the story
Wonderful! Loved every word of it
I love the suspense
Very well written plot.
cliff hanger.
love the suspense!
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