I agree with GretchenWeiners, the voice in my head yelled the whole time! It is still yelling while I am typing! That is why I'm using exclamation points! lol
Jack should have dumped Susan. She is just plain mean. I can totally hear an old couple arguing like this, though... Very funny, in fact, I can't stop laughing at your obvious side notes and details (he wipes his eyes with a tissue (they have tissues in the car)). LOL
I really liked the ending and it was a great story :)
ReplyDeleteAmazing story I got lost in it.
ReplyDelete.."and they lived happily ever after." Grade A, nice job
ReplyDeleteI like the all caps dialogue. I yelled through it in my head. Good story concept.
ReplyDeleteNice story! Great ending
ReplyDeleteThe voice in my head has never yelled so much reading a story!
ReplyDeleteGood story, it was well written and had just enough humor.
ReplyDeleteGood story. I liked how it was written.
ReplyDeleteI agree with GretchenWeiners, the voice in my head yelled the whole time! It is still yelling while I am typing! That is why I'm using exclamation points! lol
ReplyDeleteWell that happened. Nice story.
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ReplyDeleteThat snowstorm was truly great
ReplyDeleteGood story with some funny humor!
ReplyDeletethat was a good story
ReplyDeleteProbably the best story I have ever read. ;)
ReplyDeleteGood story, very exciting!
ReplyDeleteGood story.
ReplyDeleteJack should have dumped Susan. She is just plain mean.
ReplyDeleteI can totally hear an old couple arguing like this, though...
Very funny, in fact, I can't stop laughing at your obvious side notes and details (he wipes his eyes with a tissue (they have tissues in the car)). LOL
Kept me reading! Well written! My head hurts form all the screaming in there.
ReplyDeleteLoved the story!
ReplyDeleteVery good story!
ReplyDeletegood story kept me reading
ReplyDeleteAwesome story!
ReplyDeleteI thought Jack was going to be dead! I like your dialogue forms.~
ReplyDeleteLove this story, super funny
ReplyDeleteGreat Story!
ReplyDeleteGreat story! Poor guy! He got mauled.
ReplyDeletei liked the happy ending
ReplyDeleteI've never seen anyone so excited to go to Canada! lol
ReplyDeleteGreat story! Really enjoyed it and loved their last name!
ReplyDeletegreat story
ReplyDeleteLoved this story! It was one of the best that I've read!
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